Very clear and good expansion and introduction about geoengineering and SRM , gives the audience good review of the definition of SRM AND GEOENGINEERING.
Very clear and obvious thesis statement at the end of the first paragraph--- the introduction paragraph.
Clear outline. Know well what you want to say.
However, I don’t think this is a agrumentive essay, as you have no opponent and proponent and rebuttal as well as the stands and thesis statement for both sides.
You have only introduced the advantages and defects of SRM, without showing your own stand and the arguments seem not powerful enough.
Still the points in this essay seems not vey collective and lack of some coherence.
In addition, some references should be added in your draft.
For the conclusion part, not review your thesis statement and main points in your final conclusion. Better mention again in the conclusion
By liang jiayue.
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